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#1 Delusional

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Posted 07 June 2013 - 23:17

I am not in the mood for shooting pictures because its rainy, but to keep the museum going I figured I would move to my next range of art. I shared some of this with Matt the other day, which made me feel like I should have been LOCKED away in a padded cell. (Granted these were written from the age of 14-17 when I went in the Army.)

This one was written 3 months before I left for basic, and one day before I went into the recruiters office.

"My Lips Grazed The Whip."


Sometimes you wonder if your really free,

Your mind tells you that you are,

So does your governments,

Don’t forget every waking move you make.

Every day you awake,

A fresh day of slavery for you to endure,

But it's not slavery!

Or is it?
It can't be!

Everything tells you that it's really freedom,

How could it possibly be slavery?

As you open your eyes,

You realize your lips are kissing the whip,

The whip of society,

The whip of slavery..

But your mind tells you free,

As does the government!

Society never claimed to own you.
How could you feel this way?

It's simple:

You don't.


This next one can show an example of why I started feeling like I needed a padded cell. This one was written right after Thanksgiving 2002.

Lost
Why do I feel like dying?
Do the shadows enjoy pulling away dreams?
Am I supposed to be crying?

Are these monsters working in teams?
Terrors of the nights yet to come,
Doubt for-telling stars till the end of time,
Must I always play dumb?
If only I'd remember I could escape of a dime.

Why do I feel prying away from life,
Dance about the shallow grave that awaits,
No longer can time tick in strife,
Ghosts only had to test the fable fates.
Horrors of the day yet to show their face,
Staring into the ever rising tide.
Maybe tomorrow I'll have the strength to give chase,
Until then I'll just wait and hide,

Why do I feel like ringing someone’s tender neck?
Tip-toe around the answer to every little item of need,

I feel simple when the rest has become high tech.
Be forewarned of one's heed.
Help me see the reason why I still play this game,
It's just another evil deed,
This is such a shame.
And in the end I just fallowed their lead..

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#2 Silent Supremacy

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Posted 09 June 2013 - 15:44

Writing is also one of my favorite past times.


Even though you have a dark'ish expression, I understand the concepts.

First one I like the best, mostly because I'm only a fan of poetry that doesn't rhyme. Nice job.

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#3 Kaye

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Posted 09 June 2013 - 16:35

I love poetry. Iv written some as well and mine aren't that great to read very dark as I was going through a rough stage ill have to find it and post
Batt Attack Xx <3

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Posted 11 June 2013 - 00:55

View PostSilent Supremacy, on 09 June 2013 - 15:44, said:

Writing is also one of my favorite past times.


Even though you have a dark'ish expression, I understand the concepts.

First one I like the best, mostly because I'm only a fan of poetry that doesn't rhyme. Nice job.
My poetry by and large uses rhymes but I do dip in other parts of poetry. It honestly depends on the mood. These were both written over ten years ago.

View PostKaye, on 09 June 2013 - 16:35, said:

I love poetry. Iv written some as well and mine aren't that great to read very dark as I was going through a rough stage ill have to find it and post
No one ever thinks their own poetry is that great. Poetry by and large ends up fitting two times in life. Love, or hurt/anger. So you either get sappy or you get dark. But poetry is meant to have some kind of life style to it. Otherwise it would not be as enjoyable.

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#5 Kaye

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Posted 17 June 2013 - 22:01

Nights turn Into days
Days turn Into night
The feeling I'm feeling aren't going away
I just want this pain to numb
The more I feel the more I'm torn
Why is it so hard
To let go of what use to be
Your memories will remain
But the pain is still there
Your gone
And never coming back

I wrote this when my bestfriend past away 6 years ago
Batt Attack Xx <3

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Posted 06 August 2013 - 19:46

The first time I seen you
You stole my heart
Everything you said always put a smile on my face
We knew it was love at first sight
You always stuck by me
Through my darkest moments
And I'm grateful to have you in my life
We have our ups and downs
Fight and make up
You will always be my one and only
True love
Batt Attack Xx <3

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Posted 08 August 2013 - 01:49

I've never been a fan of poetry (or writing in general), but I have to admit the stuff you guys are writing is pretty cool :)

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Posted 14 August 2013 - 08:01

Liquid Oxygen is Paramagnetic and Blue,
Glands of Spiral Murex Shells contain Dye coloured Purple,
My Poetry is verily a Nerdy Home Brew,
Much like Steve Urkel

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Posted 17 August 2013 - 01:21

Forgive me if I'm bad at this. Everyone needs to start somewhere :)

*ahem*
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Edited by Mr Fen, 17 August 2013 - 01:22.

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#10 Rupert

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Posted 17 August 2013 - 01:29

Oh dear. Oh dear, oh dear.

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Posted 19 August 2013 - 20:06

I wrote a poem once, it's widely regarded as one of the most romantic poems of human history...
Violets are blue,
Roses are red,
Quit with the poetry,
And make with the head!
  To fight and conquer in all our battles is not supreme excellence; supreme excellence consists of breaking the enemy's resistance without fighting.  




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